P5

Evaluation of feedback given
The feedback given back to me is good, it shows where my strengths and weaknesses are. From this feedback, I can use it to improve my script to a better standard.

Changes I am going to make to my script

  • use more interesting vocab
  • change the story so it makes sense 
  • introduce the character Bill a little bit better


Plan for script

  • Add better punctuation to make it more effective 
  • Add more detail about the scenes.
  • Use cut-to so it makes more sense.

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